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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Tue May 23, 2017 1:44 pm

Here the time is now,
Now the place is here,
There is no past or future.
Breathe in the moment.

(Welcome back Space Junkie. Thought I would craft a haiku.)--OM
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Queen_MAB4 » Mon Jun 19, 2017 12:00 am

Moment my Liege
-By: Michelle

Moment my Liege
I can't stomach this secret no longer
After the Siege
I laid down my life as cannon fodder

Hypothetically of course, I took a page
Of my book and burned it in the fire
Letting the embers take it in rage
Only because I like you sire

Truly, I do!
I got rid of the truth
So you'd avoid the noose
And save your troops

Please tell me once
That I'm worthy of you in your eyes
Liege, I'm a dunce
For believing in the fates of the skies.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Tue Jun 20, 2017 12:08 pm

operatormike wrote:Thanks, Sheena. That last one is about my father. I have a longer version in mind, but time constrains me.

Where are the other writers? Sheena? Clementine? Space Junkie?

Someone please start a poem with "Honor"


How about something good with 'honor' -

Honor Blackmon, Christine Keeler, Mandy Davies, all those naughty English girls,
Margie Thatcher, Terri May, Vicki Reg, and latterly Liz, and ooh! Diana.
Diana was really bad!
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Tue Jun 27, 2017 10:18 am

Thank you two queens; Queen Michelle and Sheena Queen of the Jungle:
Queen_MAB4 wrote:For believing in the fates of the skies.

Sheena wrote:Diana was really bad!


So rather than choose between bad and skies, I will combine them.

Bad skies blowing in from the western hills,
Gotta plow this field before the storm hits.
Mud bogs the tractor down and lightning kills.
Surely Mary is scared out of her wits.

The black storm clouds are threatening to break.
Wind, rain and who knows what will be here soon.
She knows I'm out here and what it will take
to stop me from saving this farm from ruin.

Can't stop now, if I keep plowing quickly,
I'll get this done and get back to the barn.
My wife, Mary, will lay prayers on thickly.
Her loving prayers save my life and the farm.
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Tue Jul 04, 2017 7:52 pm

You lose it on the third word. 'bad skies' blowing is trite, cliche.
It reminds of dramatic monologue, but no hardscrabble farmer would linger with such treacly sentiment.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Wed Jul 05, 2017 9:16 am

So your saying the poem blows?
I concede to your review. It was a bad hair day.
Think it started with a bad hair dryer blowing.
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Thu Jul 06, 2017 11:25 am

Nope. Am saying learn from the effort. Reinvent yourself. Invest in Bukowski, a real poet of Excellence and Truth. For dramatic monologue you must first study. Tops are Frost and Browning.
operatormike wrote:Since that last post is oddly random, probably an advertising bot, I am going to follow my own post...down!

Down the winding stairway in the berth deck
sleeps a humble sailor in his hammock.
He left his red haired girlfriend and his mother
To serve his God and country in due honor.


Reviewing, saw this one as a father homage. You could do him better. Was the intention an haiku? Impressionistic?
Recommend: First eliminate the adjectives. Humble does nothing in this verse and red-hair to be effective would have to be reflected. Consider in the context you have invented real language play - e.g., due ---> dual since there are two he is serving by way of desertion. A picture of irony to be sure - work on it to make that sing in this singular stanza.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Clementine » Fri Jul 07, 2017 6:34 am

Is blowing the last word? Was that a poem, OM? lol I am not sure.

Blowing his horn in the early morn
Arthur smirked at all this scorn
Windows closing, neighbors yelling
Didn't they know his sound was telling?
Attention, noticing, and being seen
That is why Arthur was so keen
to wake up early and make a scene.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Fri Jul 07, 2017 10:45 am

Clem achieves in skillful nonsense tradition.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby sweetshar » Sat Jul 08, 2017 9:33 pm

Scenery that is quite not true
In front of the mirror waving a weak hi!
Until when that image will hide
I took picture I've got only blank I cry

Not sure when such things will fade
Where showing's already not as hard as it is
Imagining how a sprout grows in seasons
Envy eats that scenery, covered itself, run away...
No one rises suddenly in this world not even the sun.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Mon Jul 10, 2017 10:26 am

To Clem,
Not meant as a poem, but Warholski said art is anything you can get away with...
or was it a way with???

To Sheena: Bukowski captures the beat and reheats it. Frost breathes a fiery soul through traditions of verse and reverse. Browning paints life and draws us in. Yet, I will forever return to Leaves of Grass, for the words of Whitman's visions may well be the winds that forever have caused our sails to billow toward newer horizons.

Sweet Shar... you send me!

To all: Sweet Shar still has the last word....away
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Fri Jul 14, 2017 12:57 pm

Nice rap on the poets. Your passion makes it insightful. Perhaps your metier is prose poetry.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Tue Jul 18, 2017 10:27 am

Thanks Dream Guru, perhaps.
I have had occasion to speak publicly. I will often prepare a speech. A mentor of mine once informed me that my forte was when I dropped the script and began speaking from the heart. So with no further ado or preparation:

Away with words
who needs the swirls slithering across the page
off to blissful nothingness
to quiet
to peace
no words
no thoughts
nothing
but
ONE
soul caressed by the loving life force of the universe
ONE
with
the
ONE
to love. to give. to live
to offer all that i am
to all who are
who are from
the ONE WHO IS
who gives gifts
who gives to me
a way with words
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Tue Jul 18, 2017 12:34 pm

Unspeakable says op
is making real
More real.
Like Kore
While her mother weeps
Bereft of green
And spring and
All the words for love.
Like food and working.
Are they tools, op?
Or products?
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Mon Jul 24, 2017 11:03 am

Products of ancient making
carved into stone
Letters are tools for the taking;
Yet, Socrates said leave them alone.
He argued with Phaedrus and told:
"Written words will make your mind weak."
Yet though he's dead for eons and cold
I can hear the wise Socrates speak.
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Wed Jul 26, 2017 6:29 pm

For metrics recommend you delete 'the' in last line.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby sweetshar » Sun Jul 30, 2017 5:38 am

Say you're sorry and I'll forget a thing
Please stay and what happened will be carved in water
You can surely convey me even with just a whisper
Those three wonderful words must worth the heartaches.
No one rises suddenly in this world not even the sun.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Sun Jul 30, 2017 2:47 pm

Shades of Jaques Brel.
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Wed Aug 02, 2017 9:48 am

Sheena wrote:For metrics recommend you delete 'the' in last line.


For metrics I got out my chisel:

Products of ancient time making,
strange symbols are carved into stone.
Letters are tools for the taking.
Socrates said leave them alone.
He argued with Phaedrus and told:
"Written words will make your mind weak."
Yet though dead for eons and cold,
I can hear wise Socrates speak!
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Postby Sheena » Thu Aug 03, 2017 12:50 pm

Now it echoes Yeats, "i hear it . . . "
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby operatormike » Mon Aug 14, 2017 9:26 am

...in the deep hearts core.

thank you, I have a book, 1000 years of Irish poetry.
Yeats is a leaf at the top of a monumental stalwart tree.
Although my blood flows from the same source,
I stumble humbly in its shadow.
Who looks outside, dreams;
Dream, dream away
Magic in the air
Was magic in the air?
I believe, yes I believe
More I cannot say
What more can I say?---John Lennon
who looks insided, awakens! ---Carl Jung
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Re: Make a new original poem off the last word in the poem a

Postby Sheena » Mon Aug 14, 2017 10:47 am

Why not go all the way: stumble humble. . . ?
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